yo man u gotta up ya emotion.........practice ya verse in front of a mirror and see how ya would deliver it man........

ya flow is choppy at some parts...with a slow flow like the one u took u must up ya delivery and make it interesting.....

quality it is what it is...but it's not that bad it's peakin at some certain parts....

Overall - u got potential like PT said but ya gotta work on ya flow..count syllables...spit ova and ova till it flows together....aiite man...keep ya head up man....

pz

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