Not Bad. I can't say your flow has improved cuz I don't think I've peeped your shit before but I got you a couple pointers on presentation of you verse. Don't write it all like a paragraph after each line press enter and space them out. The flow was pretty good to me but it threw me off on how you had it in paragraph form. Space it out and it will much improve you replies AND your flow even though you didn't change the flow... lmao... since this is text the flow all depends on how people read it.

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