you had some decent multis, the structure was a bit off, but the flow was alright, it got a little repetitive, you should have switched yoiur flow up a little bit, maybe introduced some commas instead of periods..... some slashes would have helped out the imagery in the piece though. Overall you had some decent punches, that faggot line just tore him one, even though its a bit played, you still pulled it off nicely id give it a 7/10 for that bar... that one line
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was just straight fire, multis, wordplay, personal... it had it all man.. even the structure was on point... definitely what won you the battle right there.....

solid lines, you could tell you worked hard and it paid off in the battle.. goodluck in the upcoming ones.