Hmmm...well seeing as it aint completed, i dunno what to say...

...but i guess i'll try...

...your usual trademark of darkness was certainly apparent here...i felt the vivid imagery bought it alive further, along with a solid use of vocab...not too complicated...but not too simple either...

...overall, i feel this it's looking good...but you're going to have to sing it for us, so we can get the 'true' jist of it....(!)...no i mean it, i'd like to hear it sung out like the song it is...

...respect...