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Old 11-29-06, 03:17 PM   #2
Young Kidd (LM)
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Wow. For the simplicity it was actually a straight piece.

Text Gangster Pieces don't usually work but this one kept me reading, which means there is MAD potential in this..

He~gone~gittem~buck, make sure the hood~stay~alive/
Piss me off and you must think todays a good~day~ta~die/

I like that line..Take out all the extra stuff though..like the Grave in the middle of multi's and the slash's...it kind of takes away from the effect the piece could of had..plus with a little rewording and complexity that line could be ill.

Elevation is Evident. STay Up Man..keep movin.
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