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12-03-06, 03:59 AM
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Ysdat
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not felt. Felt very kindergarden to me. Even though its a poem and rhyme dont matter, the fact you rhymed fucking simple made it seem weak, if ya gonna rhyme do it properly.
The metaphorical element is blah.
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