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Old 12-09-06, 03:48 AM   #9
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i'm pretty blazed right now, so i'm gonna break this down

His girlfriend is a bitch, we were suppose to chill and instead
she stood me up........... pulled my pants down and gave me head
i like this line, i think the wording is pretty well done which give a simple concept more of a punch to it
So far, I beat you 2 times n he's shook from glocks
if revenge is suite. then you tried getting a room n couldn't book a spot
this is kind of a played pun, the whole suite/sweet thing mixed in with revenge. so it's a bit played to me, it's a well done flip but nevertheless, a flip.
I see the fear in duke, I dont care im spearing him with the 1-2
this battles career sucicide. im glad I drop hotlines everywhere for you
i personally think this is nice, i think it's a fresh take on it, you see career suicide shit in verses every now and then but i haven't seen it involved this way, so it's pretty good
This weak body isn't apporaching me, it'll be a joke to see
police officer's tried using his rotator cuff and paris hilton broke free
it's a fresh line, not exactly a dope line, but i like this
dont mind his wackness cuz he drops sloppy and ignorant
this kid wrote Bad..... Micheal Jackson is suing for copywrite infringment
this is probably one of the more generic lines you have, but it's still a solid line
he thought he was a pimp even tho there all dogs like yeller
but seriously all his tricks juss make u laugh.. like Pen and Teller
not really feeling this one so much
im bringing heat cuz he wants to plan for this week
I heard he's ahead of the curb....as my car flies down the street
gives me a funny visual, like i'd see in a cutscene of a GTA game. i like it, it's a cool line


It's all you, man up to ur weakness, don't stall dude
U got so many word problems, I needed an all-nighter just to solve u
i thought this was nice, it'd be a good line without the quotes, but they really do add more to it, nice way to open. another simple concept with a good addition to it which made it a nice one
#1 now, but I'll Strip n' seize ur title n' chill
Ur in the Pole Position, but u never seem to Tease us with skill
i don't really like this, it's not bad but i don't like the Tease half of the pole position relation, it's a little to plain and it's not really a diss that i feel has the potential to be a haymaker
Said u had a job interview? That true? I doubt it, slim
Translation: Glocks in a suit tellin' a fat bitch to go out with him
it's nice that you used the personal, it kept the line fresh. but it's not really THAT funny, and i think that's what drives this line is humor, so it fell short with it's intentions
I hear u got no friends, but u still try to get outta ur home
N' lead fights for human rights, cuz humans have always left u alone
i think this is fresh, to be honest i overthought it when i first read it and didn't understand it. might be the weed. but anyways, after i looked at it again i got it, and i liked this line.
Wack fuck, u'll get hurt with the punches I'm givin'
K, Roger, without a space n' comma's where u'll work for a livin'
i'll be honest with you, i didn't know what the hell Kroger was before i looked at this line. so i looked it up to be fair, and it turns it into a decent line, the only downpart is the K, Roger part, it doesn't seem too smooth.
U thought RV's easy, but saw me standin' like a great tower
N' moved to Plan B, but we know that works for less than 48 hours
i've used a Plan B line before, this wasn't bad at all. the set up isn't very good, i think it should relate to the punchline concept, but it's whatever ya know. the line was solid.
U've beaten D. Stroyer n' a bunch of newbs ur dying to see again
Ur champ run's been such a joke, it figures u just faced a Comedian
this was a bad choice as a closer. it doesn't have that punchline that would make you reconsider your decision by the end of a battle which is why you usually want a good closer. a person usually determines if the verse is good or not by the time they get to the last few lines, so you really have to re-up their opinion with your closer and this wasn't the line to do it with.


overall it wasn't a bad battle. i think DTH is dope, and wanted him in my crew on here, so it's nothing against him, he's a nice up and comer but i've seen him drop much better than this, he flashed the potential on a few lines but overall wasn't consistent enough to keep me interested. Glocks didn't drop his usual self either, but then again he is battling in a few leagues and was pressed for time. Regardless, as this verse stands it was an average one with more consistency that basically took the battle, pretty solid verse.

vote-Glocks

sorry for the crazy breakdowns of each line, but i'm zoned lol
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