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Old 12-09-06, 03:55 PM   #7
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Wordings :

-Make sure whatever you are saying is as clear as possible, while still getting the punchline across. This basically means to type it out like you would say it in real life.

for example;

You a funny gay, we all know that sonnys lame
Its party cloudy, and today just aint a sonnys day

You would never actually say "it just aint a "sunnys" day" in real life. reword this. .

Your raps wack as fuck.. Homie ya style's hardly rowdy
& I knew it wasn't a sonny day before I realized it was partly cloudy

^something like that works much better. the concept isn't that good to begin with, but it's not terrible. Just make the most out of whatever concept you have by playing off of the punchline. This is easier said than done, but in the example I just showed you, I made better use of the same concept simply by starting the second line with what flows off the tongue naturally... "I knew it wasnt a sonny day" and then ending with the punch.
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