come walk with me ike....n ill let you in of what i feel of this ight?

its good shit i told you that but now lets get picky

the back back back part...up up up the dubs so it hits harder...put a lil echo on the dubs of that too so it resinates in your ears...

again up the volume on the my love part

if you can make the "dammit i got a life to find" part a lil more emotional....

the hook - up the volume of the half empty half full parts....it would resinate more in your ears.....

second verse in my opinion follows the directon of the first flowwise too much....the verse your writing i hope has a lil different direction to make me want to be sure to listen to the whole thing over n over....not just parts of it.....

i didnt hear too much in the second verse that could be improved that would make it that much better like in the first....but some real feed for a real good song....rtf on "fly away"

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