Bad topic to do but every1 starts off rapping about this for starters, sex weed n runnin from cops, least u didnt have a nine in yer pants

"Fighting almost everyday until I became very spritutal/
Now all the girls thinking me and homies gets very physical/" -"very" - need to work on the vocab, vocab's what makes a peice.

"I never falled in love" - falled? Check ur grammar. "fell"

"My main doggs are taken out of this earth,now I was feeling hurt/
Their spirits is my only gift,and my anger will be my only curse/" I think u switched tenses (past to present back to past)aswell, "are" then "was".

Keep writtin tho, elevate.