Good piece.. I don't feel it needs much work, unless you want EVERYBODY to understand it.. When I first saw the title, I expected one of those "anti-United States, anti-war, what's wrong with America?" types of pieces, which are by far the most overused and annoying topics on the web..

On of those pieces I couldn't stop reading once I got into it .. Had an enjoyable and intelligent humor that was challenging to understandd, man.. Keep doing what you're doing, and let me know if every do anything w/ this!

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