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Aiight... Just got home n its 5am so this'll be short bro...................
I was a bit iffy about the hook at the start, but man.. Hey... this is actually pretty tight.. Right, I'm playing this on hi fi and its still sounding a little harsh on the vocal clarity.. Your EQing has gotton a lot better, I think you just need better hardware atm, youve outgrown whatever your using cause your style once the verse kicked in was very pro, jus not pro quality in your clarity department..
The concept you chose is interesting, I've often entertained thoughts like we could exist in a singular concious experience tailored to our own self and placement across the infinite complexity of existance. But I dont exactly think its good to be that self centerered.
One thing with the lyrics I was kind of hoping for more of a proper story to apply this concept to with a final verse peicing together a conclusion.... Or more potent philosophical statements to explain why it is you chose this subject to make a song about cause it could be seen as a comical arbitrary hypothetical peice rather than something bringing light to intricate concepts in life which is what youd be wanting to aim for with a 'deep' track.. In other words, most people would glaze over what your actually trying to get across because your not saying heaps of stuff regular cats would think "ohhh yeah I feel like I'm in the same situation or have empathy towards his feelings or opinions in this track".. But this concept would have been hard to create a sense of empathy with due to the subject itself... so iunno.. You did what you could with what you had to write about.
The beat was good.. suited your subject..... And other than that, I had no problems or comments to add.. This was a tight song.... I wouldnt hesitate to put this on a mixtape or whatever... Good shit dude....
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