ok ok.....quality is about as bad as mine mic wise, so me and u are in the same loop.....but the concept is nice....feelin, multis is coo.... like the voice inserts in the beginnin and end, fits the concept

my advice.....i wouldnt voice over the whole thing unless its macthes like exactly, thats what i do anyway......kinda sounded off when ud say the end of ur word and u ran outta breath but ur adlib finished it off for u...
emotion is def there, sense the emotion

the 2nd part i could tell the vocal sound difference, it was more faint....sounds like u turned them down there .......

do u use audacity?...hope u do

but anyway...lyrics - shyt u know they were good no question
delivery was coo.......i know its kinda hard to get the breath control down spittin as fast as u did, over time once u get used to spittin that fast, u should be good

overall....with the exception of the voice overs......decent track....good concept with that touch of emotion

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