wow

you need alot of work kid

basic rhyming, scant vocab and brought nothing original to the table whatsoever

and don't get you panties in a twist and think this is some hate reply or something

you just need to read more dope shit dropped by better heads and keep writing, only way forward

seems you're at a pretty early stage of rhyming, try and play with rhyme schemes, add multies, better imagery, originality, twists and come with some better material that the readers gonna enjoy looking at. lengthen your drops too, cos that 8 bars doesnt let me get into it at all