I made a mistake seein' the movie, I shouldn't have looked
Ur PROOF the cliche's true, the movie is never as good as the book
Ur movies have all flopped n' its a fact that I heard
I ain't talkin' terrorism when I say The Two Towers crashed n' burned
Only nerds watch ur shit, those stuck with computers
Here's a challenge, find me ONE kid who's seen the trilogy that isn't a loser
Now, the lands of the battles that went down showed hurt beings

^Your last 4 lines werent as hard hitting and kinda ended dissapointingly. Overall solid verse though.

vs.
This fucker will choke, when he realises all the fuckin records i've broke,
ur creators first name is J.K. .... n we all can see you're nothin more than a joke.
ppl look out for deals you know and this bitch has the other clowns back,
and when they see that they'll warn'er brothers... so harry potter'll lose his contract.

^you coulda done way more with that last line.

Becuz of consistency, my vote is:

V-DaTrusHurtz