this was rather intresting....
i mean for your 1st drop you decided to come to open mic?
and you did drop a verse that wasn't really long at all...
your flow was aight and topic wasnt to creative but something...
all around it wasnt to good but i can see you getting better in due time.....

keep trying and focus on making your verse longer and try to get creative while still sticking to the topic good attemp....