very wierd but original... why u would do something like this is out of my question... but some parts it was good... its a little hard to follow so i changed speeds in some parts to make it flow better. some rhymes basic.. some better then others... work on ur wording scheme... besides that this was an akward story telling time... lol. but still it made sense and got a little more interesting when she got kidnapped and killed that dude but still wouldnt kill her self..... i liked it... it was ok. keep up the good work.... and keep droping.

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