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Alright First Off The Vocabulary In This Piece was To SimpleYou Used The Most Commons Words, Your Structure Was A Tornado All Over The Place I Saw No Wordplay Not a Very Intresting Piece, Need Some Work alright For A New Kid, Rhyme Scheme Was So So Had alot Of Multi's But That's Not Everything In Rap. Open The Picture You Need More Imagination.
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Knock Out Stroke
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