niceeeeeeeee with the start....with the sample then fade to black n bring it back....i love the rhyme scheme that opened the song....really get you to pay attention...the hook is very amaturish....you start okay on it....but its pretty evident you struggle with the high notes....keep it low i see what you were tryin to do with goin high....but it seems to be a little higher then your range.....the next verse is good, but it would benifit from some more adlibs to add a third demsion to the track...have the listener listing to numerous things at once....ya know?? the hook at the end you didnt go as high as the other hooks it seems, still kinda eh, but better....a lil lower then that one n i fell youd be back in your vocal range, otherwise nice stuff....with an inspired meaning

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