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Old 03-20-07, 04:26 PM   #7
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M-some good rhyme schemes, multies, and flow, but i just wasnt feelin the overall vibe...opener and closeres were also mediocre...i think this verse had a lot of potential but you stayed on the whole "perverted prisoner" thing way to long...

Trey-alright...i thought the other verse focused too much on the perverted and sexual part of jail but this entire verse is based on that...some alright rhyme schemes but thats about it...i wasnt really feelin ne punchez or the opener or closer or vocab or wordplay...this verse could be improved a lot

overall-id say M took this battle...both had some decent things in their verses, but M's was just slightly better...Trey also had a lot of random punches and lines (ex: "fam named jim")...closer than i thought itd be tho

v/M the literal
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