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Old 03-27-07, 02:45 PM   #2
Jae Gutta
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iight checkin this one out...


Beat: It's cool kinda bland though..


Okay, first off fam this is no hate but I feel like your voice isn't strong enough. The lyrics are cool but it's more "internet" style where it's a lot of syllables and a lot of thinkin put into it for scheme. I'ma say this when you write a SONG just let yourself go don't restrict yourself. The hook is cool but it doesn't grab the ear and that's the point of the hook to make you wanna listen to the verses. Now nextly, it's a few times where you just completely fell off beat and you need to tighten that up. I know you're better than this but it sounds like you threw it together in a sense. Make sure when you lay shyt it's the best possible product you can make don't accept any less than that. Decent track I just know you can do better.

-Gutta
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