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Old 04-03-07, 11:01 AM   #13
DaTrusHurtz
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u from tennesee you dont just play wit ya fam...
........on the court
yall incest, accordin to ya sig you the best....
.......at the wrong sport

vs.

our coach is the shit, dont fuck with us, dummies
only pearls you guys touch are all your schools fucking money
chris?he's a verb.. we'll lofton yall's weak ass...
while vandy.. lofton.. s of fucking shots that never hit the glass

Really up and down battle, the 3 lines I quoted were all solid quotables, real nice, but everything else I read was ehh. Tiggo, u reallllly gotta fix ur structure. With doin' the ... thing, u can do that for a punchline, but never do that for a setup. Do it more like this

Blah blah blah blah blah blah
blah blah blah ...
... blah blah blah

Ur way is confusing and hurts the flow of the diss. Ur sig diss was nice, but everything else was either played or forced. The fact that u had to explain some of ur shit shows that, u should never explain punches. If they don't make sense without u explaning it, they're no good. Wireless, u had a few nice nameplays with the Lofton and Bruce Pearl thing. Everything else u had I felt was kinda basic. Like the opener and closer. They're dorks, that coulda been about anyone. So could the 3 and out thing. You had a few cool lines though and didn't come as forced so u got this.

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