I'm writing this response as I'm listening to it. This is the 3rd time I have. I'm feelin the beat. It definatly goes along with the theme, and that sound of someone takin a hit in the backround is phat. Lyrically you stayed with the topic you intended. The hook is intense lol. The flow is nice, goes really well with your rhyme scheme. There was nothing really choppy in this. Don't get me wrong though. It's not perfect, you can work on speakin a little more clear. And what you say can always be better, same with my songs and everyone else's.

Overall: I'll give it like a 7-8/10. I liked it to tell you the truth. It's not alot like my style, but I was feelin it. Good job man.

Rtf,
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=241113
Thanks man.