overall I could follow the story... But you need to work on not using such basic rhymes.. dead/head dam/cam route/out it just makes the verse too basic... It flows/sounds a lot better when u use multis ex. Just hop on the beats they nick name me "beat rider"/ Sonic boomin on lames like guile in "street fighter." that was just a quick example off the top of my head but its an example none the less.

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