New to RV
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IP:
your bars are stereched... You need to take out some words...
For example...
so ive been at this rap thing for 5 months and 3 days,
and im comin up faster than the cars drive on the free ways,
it would flow better if it said this.
"i've been at this rap thing for 5 months and 3 days
comin up faster then sports cars on the freeways"
It still pretty much says what u want it to but, its shortened and flows better... I feel like the whole verse can be fixed like that and re-done. keep writin
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