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Old 04-14-07, 11:08 AM   #6
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Vote Mariah.

Mariah had more complexity in her verse and looked like she actually took time with it. L.I; sorry dude, but it looks like you came lazy.. kinda like you freestyled a story. It had imagery but lacked emotion and you had few internals to compliment the flow. It was a boring read. You both need to work on emotion in your pieces.. try incorporating the five senses or using exclamation points or alliteration to build your pieces to a climax. Word. See ya next week.
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