Vote: Terumoto

Your piece was nice. I liked how the story turned out. Nice rhyme scheme. OK emotion. Decent imagery.

Thomas
Your piece was good. You have the style-structure of a real writer. But what made you lose to me, was certain parts of your piece didn't add up. But, at the same time, I saw where you were going with it. Your wording at the end took away from the whole piece. You could've worded that better to make it SOOO dope.

Good battle from both..

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