yea this beat is grown and sexy....the first verse needs to smooth it out a lil....its a lil too hype on a track like this....needs to be seductive...its a lil rushed....thas my only suggestions for that one.....second verse....it starts out with 4--365436 ma's a lil overdose....the flow is alot more choppy then the first verse....need to make it flow a lil more....your starting to get the hang of it tho....prahject on this is what i was talkin buot for the first guy....smooth seductive....instead of bouncy n fast.....i think the end line coulda been dilivered better but still good shit....this isnt that bad of a remake...but i cant help compare it to the real version....not bad tho....

rtf on "real hip hop"

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