Beat is sick.........

1st Verse - dude came in real crisp........his flow wuz on......not much delivery but it wuz laidback....lyrically it wuz where it needs to be at on a love track......

2nd Verse - flow choppy as fuck, and repeatin "mah" wuz mad corny.........sounds mad unnatural when ya spit man......and the erection line at the end wuz off, you rushed it so it could fit......yo before u write a verse read it ova and ova and see how the transition of flow doesn't have awkward breaks.........

3rd Verse - came in nice cocky swag.........way more descriptive bout the topic.....feelin it...came the best outta all three....

pz

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