I have a lot to learn...
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IP:
Ransum - Alright concept, poor execution. You need to work on your flow, and your choice of words. One thing that is a terrible habit is to use the same word more than once, close together. You did that a few times.
Irrational - Your verse was, overall, of better quality than ransum's. Concept wasn't really original, basically it is exactly what I would expect from the war for peace topic. It would have been better to bring something unique, maybe you just didn't try too hard because of your opponent or something..
Anyway, V/ Irrational
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