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Old 03-11-03, 10:07 PM   #2
varentao
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erm...are you a virgin?!...nah only kidding...

...this was simple, very simple...i could see what you were trying to do....use humour to put through a serious point...

...but it was too blunt at times, not enough edge...sounded too simple, not enough complexity...you need a bit of both if you are to make a 'satire' kind piece work...or at a lot of the first...

...still, has some sort of value to it...some of the points are there to see...but it just doesn't seem 'biting' enough...not enough edge...

....respect...
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