The Write Weight
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eh.
this battle wasn't up to par on what i thought it would be. You both really do need to improve, and I thought Irrational was better than what he showed here. Grammer and spelling, grammer and spelling, grammer and spelling. What the hell? Did neither of you go to school?
Jonathon's Tip
Don't substitute s's for z's
Don't abbreviate words like because to bcuz
Don't have profanity in every line
Tell a decent story line
Come on, both of you, yall are better than this.
Irational - Your verse was decent, for your skill level, you just need to learn how to form your skill into a wepon. You don't grasp the concept of correct grammer and spelling, it makes your verse 10x better. You had a DECENT story, by DECENT i am very leaniant. Keep writing, just try to spell shit right, and try to make everything legable
Jay-Brook - Your storyline was good, and your flow was ok, but you just got lucky this week. Listen man, if you don't learn how to get your spelling and grammer issues under control you WONT elevate. Thats your problem, you just got to learn how to deal with that and you will be a good writer..
v/Jaybrook
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