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Old 04-28-07, 11:59 PM   #12
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tha fuck? i don't hate on anyone. Just cuz i predict you to lose don't mean anything
Your a dope text head. you can handle ya own show...just keep provin me wrong.
Aignt NO dickriders in this league.



Bob-1st punch was weak. the multi threw it off actually. poorly worded. This could have been better, the wordplay is what killed the harshness here. overall concept was eh.

Show-1st punch was absolutely dope. i usually read alot of bob's battles. and i've never seen this shit used against him. Dope wordplay. overall concept was pretty damn clever. 2nd punch wasn't as good, but still a good concept. wording was a lil off..but still nice.

bob-2nd punch was a lil better. the overall wording was good. i liked the concept as well. i think if you would have worded both bars like this you could have pulled it off.

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