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Mariah- It was a tad bit short, BUT the storyline was great. The flow and emotion are always shown throughout your pieces and it was no surprise here. This was not the best you've ever done, but it was a nice piece. I loved the wording in the first stanza, it was good. Overall, nice job.
Jon- You also did a nice job, BUT I didn't like how you put every section in quotes. OK when I read a topical/poetry battle, I don't expect it to be a conversation the whole time, that's not the point in my eyes. So I couldn't really get into it a whole bunch, but you didd have a decent storyline to go with it. Overall, not as good as Mariah to be honest.
v/Mariah, good champ match.
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