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Old 05-10-07, 07:49 AM   #8
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Voted For: Lay Fear

Here's how you can tell Fear says whack stuff in his rhymes
even HE's surprised someone wastes their time crushin' his lines!
ok
You hyped cuz you got 4 wins? But they were weak farts, check
you steppin' to a Big Dog now.. and u aint got a deep bark yet
lightly below average preety weak honestly..
I'm smotherin' him with skills, but I can also get 'em buried
so I'll give 'em his space.. 6 feet under the ground in a cemetary
ok...
How else can I say this? Girls dont let you spray thru their legs.
they only 'fuckin Lay on the bed'...when they fuckin' lay on the bed!
nah i aint feeling this man...
He wasn't known here, RV didn't even know this kid rhymed
but I just changed all that...
now, you're known as the dude Quotez killed in 10 lines!
not a good ending either...

man ya verse had alot of simple bars noting to creative and no punches really either you had a basic flow and thats sum ya verse up...



Yo..
Locations irrelevent dude, u tryin to harm me?..I doubt ya style
cuz if this guy reppin Cinn.,..well I guess I'm straight out the bible
at first i aint get it then i re-read it decent word-play..
check his sig.., na my punches? hes barin some, this geeks a laugh
not common to quote yourself first...but embarrassin to be the last!
slightly below average...
as long as were on the topic..check this..verse is like paintin with ink
cuz if knowledge is all the power of existence...then why ain't he extinct?
aight..
lolz..this guys whack, played, weak, unoriginal..so I'll be at fault wit a gun
n' counterattack isn't ya tactic..jus our technique for assualtin you wit one
aight...
this is fun for me..ya goin for 3-2?...well I'll leave ya battered in flandered
cuz if he claimin he's a famous quote...then he jus shattered my standards
im guess'in you probley ment HE's not My but decent ending...

your verse had more creativeness a bit of word-play some attemps at decent punches flow was decent you def was trying more with everything and not a bad verse besides like a bar or 2 i thought you aint need...
decent verse thou...


vote lay fear by far from more attemps at decent punches and word-play...