Nice piece kidd, though I am a bit uneasy about the use of too much vocab in poems, it was a nice piece.
Quote:
As once more i rise to the fore of tides
That come with the lion that stalks it's prey
I take not the roar, but the sharp moving claw
Of time and your feelings second by second
Changing from extremes of dying prosperity
I live not in the world you want me to be
For i am anchored in this hard weathered ground
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My favorites lines that I have read in this piece kidd, flowed nicely and worked the mind. Though the strcuture is a bit fuzzy, the entire piece was brought out good, I wish that there was a bit more imagery behind your piece it was still nice kidd...
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