Work on it... You just need to play with that cadence and get little more rhythm in it. Basically all you got is some rhymin worda that don't go together to well. If you want it to flow right think to yourself "Is this something I would actually say?" like if you were going to say "Man my money's so right" but you wanted to squeeze it in by sayin "Man, so right is my money" it just won't work

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