Fix grammar errors.
fix a lil bit on the imagery and some on the emotion.
It get it on its utmost expression you have to make it flow as constant and imaginative.
Some lines were just too simple and some didn't fit in at all.
You got some potential and if you fix it up it can definately be a better OM.

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War|Pestilence|
Death|Famine|

|Atrocious|
|Corruptive|Depraved|
|Heinous|Malevolent|Sinister|

That's pretty fucking evil to me.....