First of all......do something to your myspace....lol
Well, I'm not really feeling the flow/cadence of this too much to be honest with you man. Your rhyme scheme on this was a little too basic too. I think you took each verse too far man. You had a nice concept but I don't think there's enough room on one track to do what you were intending. You could have made a whole song with any one of the subjects and you tried to shove all three into one song. I think that if you were trying to shove all three points of view into a song you should have made them on the same exact topic, but from each perspective.
Anyway, not the best I've heard from you man.......but there was some good.....lol. I really liked the hook. Its simplicity worked well with the beat dropping like that and the production level sounded great throughout.
Good shit man