eh not bad...... delivery of the wordplay could use some touchin up, i see ur point but the delivery needs some polishin, some played concepts here and there but yo i see ur just elevatin like everyone else

i like ur structure, although nothin new at least its solid
cyclops line was coo
metal four line was kinda forced.....u couldve been like.....
i aint rappin here, ur broad loves fuckin me yea thats what i Meta-for(met her for)

rest was either basic or played..... coo flow tho..... try watchin tv if ur lookin for concepts and tryin to be a lil original.....

ps i acknowledge it was a keystyle so big ups for producin that