good piece, excellent multi's... multi's are almost too good, kinda distracted me from the topic... i like how you didn't compromise the purpose by trying to come up w/ voc. that didn't match the piece, that happens all to often, and i appreciate that you didn't just look for the closest word that rhymed... i look foward to reading more from you, keep writing..

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