take a page outta your sex life dude, you're nothing much
for real, how many battles before you prove you fuckin suck

what in the fuck is good about this? it doesn't even make sense, not one part of it...the set up is completely irrelevant to the actual"punch" and the punch makes no sense to anything.

you'll need alot of luck, i'm about ready to burst
grab a 4 leaf Clova... but that guys even worse

this is fucking basic as well...set up, stupid....punch....WOWWWW...it's so impressive that he added "4 leaf" to somebodies name, which turned his punch into meaning....grab a guy thats worse than you for good luck because his names clova....the wordplay here fucking sucks dude..if you don't see that you're stupid as fuck....not to mention the fact, to even bring up someone so shitty, is to hurt yourself.


i'll slap ya around, like when you're in your room
you have so much whack shit dude, you could get high off the fumes

i'll slap you around, like when you're in your room? that doesn't make any sense either....you have so much whack shit dude, you could get high off the fumes..
that actually wasn't too bad...but the fact that he didn't even set it up AT ALL...let alone decently....is what makes it bad...if he's not going to have punches where the first line sets it up....than what is the purpose of the the other lines?

nah i'm not serious, i'm messing around, having a beer
i get straight to the point, phenom's just queer

basic, no complexity whatsoever....and if i had a dollar for everyime some new fucking tool has used this, i would buy this site, and kick people like you off of it

after i own 91% of the world because of how fucking rich I am.

i'll tear you apart, more of monster than that wall in boston
and i'll break ya down faster than pychaiatrist with a shotgun

once again, these are two seperate lines that have nothing to do with eachother.
2nd line was decent....but it had no fucking set up..which makes it an incomplete punch.

you're no good, your shit just doesn't fly at this board
you couldn't land a decent punch, in a brawl at the airport


This is as close as he came to having 1 full complete decent punch....instead, he either used no set up....or his set up just contradicted his follow up

In order to be able to land, or not land....you have to be abloe to fucking fly in the first place...the first line he said your shit just doesn't fly....so to say he couldn't land a decent punch.....is to say that his shit would be flying in the first place....the only this changes....is if the first and 2nd line have nothing to do with eachother...in which case..it was another incomplete punch..which is the story of his whole entire verse.

it was either no punch at all..or incomplete....atleast phenom was able to create complete punches that made sense......

and it's funny you say"shitty this, shitty that"


because it's better to have shitty anything...than nothing at alll.

shut the fuck up, i know that you have probably grown used to the warmth of your friends balls on your fucking forhead over that much time, but you gotta cut the shit....and stop being a biased little faggot who is judging hip hop writing, and not using any elements of hip hop or writing to do so.

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