I liked the raw setting that this piece brought out, but the whole letting your emotions go, is a road that has been ventured out too much upon. It's nice when there is a curve ball thrown in the mix of the style, but this was not that sorta piece. Emotion wise it was straight to the point, nothing really stood out to me besides that fact. Imagery was to an extent non-existant, not saying that there was none, but was minimal. Strucutre wise it was decent, I would have liked to have seen a bit more of a break up into stanzas, but this was nice, it might have given the piece less of an apperance of one that went on forever.
but like I said it was a nice piece, just not expanded into other realms that doesn't really entise the reader...
Quote:
I Cant Promise You A Life Of Sunshine
Riches Or Wealth Or An Easy Pathway
Through Changes Growin Older But
I Really Wish You Would Help...
Through It All I Can Promise All My
Hearts Devotion And A Smile To Chase
Away Your Tears Im Down To Be Tha
Man That You Go With People Can Talk
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Nice emotion, just carry out an extention of that and try maybe speaking from a metaphorical sense, that helps alot in these piece, nice though...
love...