I think creativity is one of your strong points, what you need to work on is improving the way you express that creativity. In general your lines are very stretched and redundant, the flow is irregular. You take too long to deliver the punch, and also the way you explain it is very long winded. If you condensed your words, you could improve a lot. Remember that it's always better to say more with less. If you can shorten a phrase, use less words, or take out words that aren't necessary, you should definitely do it.

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