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Old 08-14-07, 09:32 AM   #9
Young Fear
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I liked this shit. The flow was mostly good and i liked the wordplay. Question. Where you talking about trying to fuck and not getting hard in one part?

cause this fall had nothing to do with gravity
and the day finally came when she tried to sell him some
the night the moon turned blue, and she happily fell in love
wish for that eclipse, watching those sky-blue eyes
but that day, the sun never decided to rise
and the sunshine seemed to stop filling those empty craters
even though it was said that he would never fail her
shift in pace, change of heart, assuming the winds keep moving
the lifted face of the sun would hide the scars and bruises
the sun had finally set, and wasn't coming back
the moon stayed out that day, and the sky turned black

If so, they got a pill for that
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