hmmmm....u need to elevate on this....the rhyme scheme stayed on point i give u that....the punches u were tryin to throw in were not creative enough and really were just basic....get more creative or complex....i give this a 5/10....well just keep practicing....work on punches and being complex with wordplay if u lookin to elevate in keystyles.....if u need any more tips...pointers....etc....send me a message and i'll help u out....id liked to see something u concentrated on other than just keystyles/freestyles....id like to see a written......~1~

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