Brother... You gotta expand on the story a bit more.. The flow and vocab of this verse was pretty simple, as long as it did the trick over the beat you were using then thats fine..

My only beef with this verse was that there was no real plot other than the guy was angry at his wife for some compleatly unknown reason, he felt a bit emotionally scarred and he ended up killing her..

Maybe you should go and chop up this verse and add some more too it..

Theres plenty of ways this could go and all the verse needs is a bit more story.......

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