the concept as a whole was ill.......not uncommon.....but ur delivery of the whole thing as far as composition and multis and flow was very carefully formed.....vocab was like whoa......complexity....psssh forget about it, this is def a piece to be read and not spoken or else the reader/listener will not capture this....

ur dash of metaphor in some places gave it a great edge but ur picture paintins in alot of places gave it some deep realism than whats on the surface of this addiction that many have.......

im feelin it.......