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Old 09-23-07, 08:26 PM   #5
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Originally Posted by Nostradamus
Brother.. Work on ya multisyllable rhymes and assonance...

I see potential in you like you could be dope you jus gotta keep elevating to a higher level.. Its all about writing rhymes that connect through strings of a few words instead of just one word shit.. And assonance is when you use words with the same vowels in strings so you get shit like "I'm handlin actors steady grabbin em daggers to stab in their abdomin backwards for tactical practice".......the assonating sound is 'a'..

Work on doing both those things while maintainin ya punchlines and always pushing ya vocab.. I'll check out the next shit you write on this n see how you went brother..



^^^^^^^i'll also take this advice about the assonance to help improve my skills...sounds real nice the way u put it down....

...o yeah and good shit scanz.....i like how u delivered it....went real well....i got no real complaints about this besides there being no multis or wordplay but i think its good the way it is.....9/10....~1~
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