ok u pretty much got ur sense of multies down in this one... but again ur forcing ur rhymes and just picking words that rhyme instead of creating a story to it... i suggest u check out some other rappers stuff that are well known here and see how they make storys to there raps instead of just rambiling on and on about nothing... and again work on ur structure... keep coming and keep droping.

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